There is movement and sound in the room. There are people here. The police. How did they get here? The neighbours must have called them. Again.
She doesn’t really see the people. To her they are just shadows flickering across her vision. Their voices are blurred, indistinct, as if under water. The red and blue lights of the emergency vehicles invade the kitchen, dancing maniacally around the walls, adding to the surrealism. All part of the same horrific dream. Maybe it’s a new nightmare? Impossible to tell these days, where one ends and another begins.
A policeman leans down towards her, attempting to talk to her. He reaches out to her. The woman whimpers, and tries to squeeze even further into the corner. The policeman moves away, deciding to leave it to the ambulance attendants.
Salt.
That’s what has set him off this time. She’s forgotten to put it on the table, and he has to get up and get it himself. He starts screaming at her, telling her how useless she is. Calling her names. Nasty, foul names. He pours salt into his hand and throws it in her eyes. So she "doesn’t forget again". To drive home his point he snatches her by the hair and throws her across the kitchen. He attacks her as she lies on the floor. Kicking at her body and head. Putting all his weight behind each swing. He’ll teach her! She tries to protect her face with her arms. A sickly crunch as the steel-cap smashes her wrist.
After aiming a couple more kicks at her head he bends down and grabs her by the throat. He squeezes. Hard. Then he starts to pick her up, his vicious fingers digging into her neck. She is choking. He raises his other hand and makes a fist. The wedding ring sparkles obscenely as it catches the light. He smashes his fist into her face.
The police and ambulance workers jump with fright as the woman screams and screams and screams.
After what seems like hours, the woman is led gently across the kitchen floor by a female ambulance attendant and a policewoman. There is a blanket draped over her shoulders. She is barely able to walk. She is sobbing miserably.
They guide her past the group of men standing near the table. Detectives and uniformed officers. They are talking in low voices. Every now and then one of them looks down at the body on the floor. The body of a man, his face and torso slashed. The snapped blade of a carving knife is sticking out of his chest, just where the heart would be.
"Salt" © Writing The Image 2007/Peter Stone 2003
2 comments:
Not my favourite kind of reading, but your words certainly paint graphic pictures.
I don't know how to adequately convey with simple letters the sound which just escaped me.
Peter, you are a writer. I hope you never suffer misgivings about that fact, although you wouldn't be human if you didn't, I suppose. In order to write well (which you do) you have to be an empathetic being. You have to have truly experienced life in addition to having observed it. And you have to have the gift/knack/ability to convey the emotions felt by imperfect beings in a way that lets others absorb those emotions and live in your 'moment'.
I lived 'Salt' for ten years. 'Salt' is why I sit here each night and into the early morning hours, writing and creating and laughing and crying. 'Salt' is why I don't sleep.
You have a gift, my friend. Use it wisely, for that gift can bring pain to your readers as easily as it can bring pleasure.
The needs of the many outweigh the needs of the few. Or the one.
Live long, Crookedpaw, and prosper.
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